지난주 작문 첨삭받은것

주제 : 친구한테 메일보내기, 내가 사는곳 소개, 어케찾았는지 얘기하고 여기 생활 설명해주기

 

Dear Sujin

 

Hi.(,) Everyone is good? without me? (Is everyone good without me?) I have been here for 14days already! Time goes like flash. Do you remember that I told you about my place? I was supposed to stay here for just 2 weeks and then find other (another) room. However, I decided to live here for longer. As you know, my place is an 38th floor apartment in the city. So every day I can see a beautiful view. And also, It's so close to my e(E)nglish school. I found this place in 'Sun brisban(Brisbane 왜틀렸지 어이없네 ㅋㅋㅋ)', It's a Korean website for those who lives in Brisbane.

A few days ago, one of my room mates moved out, and the day befor yesterday, new room mate has come came. 왜 has come은 안되는지 모르겟당 물어봐야지 .Now I live with 5 other girls. 4 is are korean and 1 Japanese. Everyone treats me so warm and friendly.

Some people who live in Australia with working holiday visa, can feel have negative feelings, and have arehomesick. But I'm very fine in here. Everything's fun, even studying! I feel like I have styed in here for more than 3 month.

Before I came here, I always asked you to go th Australia with me, And and still now, I hope you can come here. I miss you and the other girls. I look foward to hearing from you again.

 

Love, Riley